Character form

[hylia]

Name: (name of candidate, honorific to receive upon bonding in parenthesis)Hylia
Age: (age of candidate in years, include season of birth if known)12-25-1994
Gender: (male or female in most cases)Female
Sexuality: (heterosexual, bisexual, homosexual, etc.)Heterosexual
Rank: (candidate, position they might have held before)
Location: (where candidate is currently living, either pre-search or eyrie)Pre-search


Personality:
(two or three paragraphs on behavior and mindset of candidate, at least 200 words)Hylia is patient,Hylia can just about wait patiently for everything. Sweet,Hylia cant stand to be mean she has to be nice every second of her life. Gentle,Hylia has to be gentle all the time she dont like hurting people,animals,etc. Lovable,Hylia is loves from allot of people she know. Energetic,Hylia cant seem to get her energy out no matter what. Compassionate,Hylia cares about the way other people feel. Generous,Hylia likes to give. Helpful,hylia likes to help no matter how hard something is. Laughing,Hylia loves to laugh. Talkative,Hylia just loves to talk she would talk all day if she could. Outdoors,hylia loves the outdoors she loves to go out and see the world. Thoughtful,Hylia thinks of others first. Understanding,Hylia understands almost anything. Joyful,Hylia cant seem to keep all her joy stored inside and ends up getting in trouble. Go-getter,Hylia knows what she wants and goes after it. Difficult,Hylia is hard to handle. Curious,Hylia is curious and sometimes gets in troube because of it. interested,hylia seems interestedc in every little thing. Animal,Hylia is a animal lover every single animal she meets she loves.


Appearance:
(one or two paragraphs on how candidate looks, at least 100 words)Hylia has hair that went all the way to her hip. Her hair was a redish-orangish, and it was straight. Her eyes are amber with thick dark eyelashes to accent her eyes. Her teeth were white and straight. She usually wore blue shirt with clouds and a Tawny simvour in the middle of the shirt. She also wore ripped jeans. Her shoes were black with painted wings on them. She was small for her age. About 5 feet 2 inches tall. She was skinny. Her finger nails were long and thin, always painted depending on her mood. But usually it was brown, red, yellow, or orange.


Family:
(candidate's family, mother, father, etc.)Mother-Name:Arianna Age:35 Father-Name:Skyler Age:37 Brother-Name:Skym Age:4
Pets:
(any pets)Cat-Name:Silver Age:8 months old


History:
(history for candidate, length depends on age)At age 8 Hylia's brother drowned and her Mother died of pnemonia. The only ones left was Silver and Skyler now. It was all she had left. Her Father got killed in a xymokoxi attack when she was only 12 she ran as far as she could then she met the Tawny. The Tawny took her in and made sure she was tooken care of but the Tawny couldnt care for her forever not by herself. So she had to get help but she couldnt think of any way to get help so she just kept Hylia a secret. No one else would know about her. Hylia was kept healthy and grew to be a very special girl. Hylia thought that she had no parents and was abandoned she cleared everything from her mind since she was young.She is now 15 years old and is with the Tawny to this very day. If it wasnt for the Tawny Hylia would probably be dead.
The only thing she remembers from her younger life is her cat that is still with her.

Desired Color: (preferred one or two colors for bonding)Tawny
Undesired Color: (unwanted one or two colors for bonding)Grey
Reasoning: (why you picked the above choices; we actually do like it when people fill out this section, so long as everyone understands that we will make decisions based on our own observations)the Grey scares Hylia for some reason...Maybe cause its so big...While the Tawny is small and took Hylia in and cared for her when she had no one else.
Injury/Mauling: (please state what level of mauling is acceptable or not) Only until the brusies and cuts appear.

[Bre]

Welcome to GS, Hylia!

First, some basic things. When you edit a form, you can edit out those tags. It makes it easier to read. The thread should be titled with her name and then rank - Hylia, Female Candidate. Commas should have spaces after them. A spellcheck and read over never hurt.

Her rank should be candidate or any other rank she might hold. She is presearch, but where is she exactly? Near Chydyn? Far north? Itnala?

This is the fifty-eighth year on Pohono. I'm assuming you want her to be sixteen in winter. That would mean she was born in winter of forty-two.

With her personality, you give us a list of traits and a brief definition of those words. However, how does that make her a person? How is she difficult, but gentle, sweet, and patient too? How is she lovable? It's a powerplay that she's lovable to everyone. Some people will react negatively to her demeanor. Emi would love her, but Ro'za would abhor her. M'rion would show her contempt, but T'koa would be ever the gentleman. You have to elaborate, coloring her in with shades of gray, turning traits into a person.

You change tense in her appearance. I'd think it would most likely be in present, but you could do past. It just can't be both. Also, Pohono doesn't have printed shirts, jeans, painted shoes, or nailpolish. It used to have some technology, but it is a rural, post-apocalyptic sort of agricultural planet

Putting one family member on each line would make it easier to read, and pets have to be bought, in order to control populations (as pets can be a luxury to most in such situations).

A tawny simourv wouldn't be able to raise a human, if there are any tawnies left out in the wilds in the Spiderlands. Simourvs have a natural affinity to be able to handle humans, but there is no automatic level of trust. They're the defenders. Tawnies might be the most loving, but they wouldn't be able to care for a human child. She would most likely of had to go to relatives or have been adopted as an orphan. One shouldn't doubt that humans can be kind, especially in small, isolate villages, fearful of koxi and protective of their own. What was her life like before her brother and mother died? Where was she born? What was it like before her father died? What happened after? Where is she now? How did she react to the riders, who only showed up a few years ago?

Also, tawnies aren't small. Yes, smaller than grays or blacks, but they are not small. Greens and rainbows are easily dwarfed by them.